The first term of Year 13 is difficult. On top of your heavy workload for A-Levels or IB, you also need to think about applying to university and of course the personal statement. This is arguably the most important part of your university application as it is your only chance (aside from Oxbridge interviews) where you can express
yourself beyond just exam grades. For non-Oxbridge applicants who normally will not have
an interview, it will be the only chance to make your application stand out from all the other candidates. Here are some tips to transform a good university personal statement into a glowing one that will make the admissions committee, who have to read literally thousands of these personal statements, sit up in their chair.
Wider Reading
It is simply not enough to apply to a competitive university without reading beyond the narrow bounds of the AS and A2 syllabi. Through your own wider reading, you can explore in more detail areas of your subject that you find particularly interesting. For example if you are applying for Politics at King’s College London, but have a real passion for political thought, then reading Sopin’s “
Libertarianism and Federalism” or Mill’s “
On Liberty” will allow you to demonstrate your commitment to the subject and more importantly will give you an opportunity to share your own unique perspectives on your chosen subject in your personal statement. If you are applying to read History, what further reading on a subject that is
not on your school syllabus have you done? For Science based subjects, what areas of your subject have you researched into that is
not required by the A-Level syllabus?
Demonstrate your genuine passion for your subject
After all, you’re going to be studying it for the next 3-4 years. Show the admissions committee in your personal statement what extra-curricular activities related to your course you have been involved in. This is one of the easiest ways to demonstrate your interest in the subject; not by saying it but by actually
doing it. If you are in Year 12, think about what work experience, charity work, or activities you can do during the 2015 summer holidays that will boost your candidacy. For example, if you want to study medicine organise work experience in a hospital; if you are applying for economics try and find work experience at a think tank or a city firm; if you are applying to read Maths, enter into an Olympiads or start studying a MOOC (massive open online course) on a particular areas of Maths. These experiences will give you the ammunition to inject detail when you come to write your personal statement and to demonstrate your interests, passions and ambitions. For students in Year 13, think back to what activities you have done which demonstrate your interest in your chosen subject.
Keep your personal statement short and concise
The biggest problem people have with their personal statements is writing too much and not knowing what to cut. There’s a line limit, equivalent to about 500 words. Bear that in mind before you start writing pages and pages! When writing, think carefully about the key words you want to express about a particular topic. When editing, go through and try to cut repetition and extraneous description. Avoid information overload. The most common mistake that applicants make is to try and say in the personal statement
every single important thing that is important to them. You cannot and should not adopt this approach, even if it means leaving out positive things. By saying everything about yourself, you risk just overwhelming and confusing the reader and at worst demonstrating a lack of judgement about what is central and peripheral to you. The personal statement is not there for an applicant to say
everything about themselves; it is there to allow a university applicant to communicate their
core message and to show the admissions officer why he/she is interested in the course, why he/she wants to study it and why he/she will be an asset to the university course. Simplicity and focus are the most potent weapons here. You want to isolate what are the most important things about you that the university admissions committee simply
must know and then build a compelling, detailed and persuasive admissions argument around this. Cramming too many points into the essay does not allow you to develop a clear portrait of yourself or a memorable and clear message. The real skill here is to prioritise on your points and then to have the stomach to let go of some of the also good material.
Keep it simple
Avoid convoluted, academic and complex language. Avoid long and awkward sentences. Keep the language crisp and succinct. The tone should be serious but easy to read.
Keep your personal statement ‘personal’
A personal statement is not a depersonalised, academic essay. Use “I” and “me” as much as you can! Don’t just list books you’ve read or work experience you’ve done, link it to yourself, your passions and your interests. The university needs to see why you’re prepared to work hard on your chosen course, independently, for three years or more. Relate your personal statement to the course and modules
It’s great that you have a passion for 20th century American theatre, but is that actually a module offered in the English degree you’re applying for? If not, why are you applying for that course? If it is a module offered, it’s unlikely to form even half of the three year course, so it shouldn’t form half of your personal statement. Find all the modules that you’re interested in taking on that course (remembering you can’t take them all) and explain why you’re interested in them.
Write about your A-levels
What A-level topics have interested you the most? How are your A-level choices helping you prepare for your chosen degree? Universities love students who understand the demands of the course they’re applying for, and see the degree as a natural continuation of their current academic work.
Work experience
What work experience have you done and how has it prepared you for university or a career? For job-specific courses like medicine, this is crucial, but even for arts subjects like English and History, universities like seeing how your chosen degree relates to work experience and your thoughts about future careers.
Mention any positions of responsibility and prizes
Things like being a prefect, running an extra-curricular club, and receiving prizes, all show organisation, enthusiasm and determination. These are highly relevant and desirable traits in all potential university students.
Write about your non-academic self
If you’re applying to study Chemical Engineering, you may find it hard to make your passion for animals and live jazz seem relevant to the course. However, if it’s a really big part of who you are, it’s still worth mentioning at the end, since it shows you to be a well-rounded and interesting person who will have a life outside of studying hours. Just remember, the personal statement is primarily about studying for the degree, and you don’t have many words to convince them of your character.
Keep your personal statement positive
There’s no room for negativity in such a short personal statement, and it conveys a non-enthusiastic character. Instead of “I’ve found the plant studies aspect of the A-level course very boring”, try, “During the A-level course, I have been most interested by how disease affects animals and humans on the macro level, and would love to be able to study this further.”
Everyone hates their personal statement
Ask any graduate to read out their submitted personal statement to you, and the chances are they will cringe so hard they may not be able to finish. The personal statement is an important step towards getting an interview, and it deserves your time and effort. But remember that the finished product is unlikely to be your masterpiece! Don’t stress about it too much; it’s just one piece of the detailed picture that universities will receive about you. Keep your writing clear, stay within your comfort zone and… be yourself!
Draft and redraft
Ernest Hemingway famously said that “
the first draft of anything is sh**.” Be prepared to draft your personal statement many times and set aside time to do this. Be prepared also to take a step back from your personal statement and come back to it a couple of days later if you feel you are not making any progress. All of this means leaving plenty of time to arrive at your final draft. For bespoke advice and expert guidance on your university admissions strategy including university and course selection, personal statement support, planning your Year 12 extra-curricular activities, university interview practice and our AS / A2 Revision Booster courses, please
contact us.